There was a time
together we crossed the street
those were the days
knowing you was a treat
Somewhere down the road
you just withered away
Even when we were together
we'd have nothing to say
The world that we had
came to an abrupt end
For no obvious reason
we took an unseen bend
In the end it was
a bitter pill to swallow
after some good times together
it turned out to be shallow
Time and tide didn't wait
for us to catch up
It gave us the time
but we didn't patch up
A glass once broken
may be glued again
But even with sincere efforts
it will never be the same again
The troubles may go away
but the cracks shall last
the future would never have
the bonds of the past...
10 comments:
pls mention the name of the original author over here ...
and don't try to plagiarise pls ....
no work in lehmann ??
I dont know if people will believe this, but it is an original from yours truly...it has not been copied from anyone else...nor is it auto-biographical...Some people can be more talented than you think...and before you smirk and wise-crack...I am one of those...
Hey Ameet!! That was really wonderful! :-) Loved it! Waiting for more....
hey max.. gr8 effort!
i hav a couple of suggestions tho- dont try 2 rhyme,
concentrate on using better words than 'treat', 'bend', n 'patch up'.
n wud i b intruding/touching a wound if i ask what inspired this poem?
Thanks for the words of wisdom...will keep them in mind...maybe the next time I pen something, it will turn out to be better. There is only one line in the entire text that is inspired by real life...and that happens to be the title...
Holy Crap!
i never thought u had it in u!unflinchingly admit that you not the 'hooligan' we once used to call you, unless ofcourse u playin sports..hehe!
anyway..splendid poem..liked it.. n if this is your first one..d rest will only get better!!
o and my tip- screw tips!!write what u wanna write n when u wanna write..don keep it in..chance of forgettin a good line o verse..sacrilege!straight from the heart better!do we know who u talkin about, eh?
hmmm..u gettin mature!!;)
Dru
Holy Crap indeed!
A lot of people think on the same lines as you!
I am and I will be the 'hooligan'! Whether we like it or not!I hope that i do get down to writing more..
Didnt want to forget a good line or verse..hence the blog!
Like i've said before, only the first line has been inspired...
The rest is creativity(???)
Hehehe
;)
very good and so true .. when and where do we loose touch ,, wht makes us take some decisions .. which beliefs are those that make u turn dowmthing which could have been beautiful down .. it is the lack of peace in our souls that prevents us from recognising the truths of life .. and can we bring ourselves to give time to what or who we want in life ?
Ameet ..U never looked like a writer 2 me..Wow but i shud truly appreciate ur writing skills if tats an original :) Keep it up dear !!
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